http://endgirl.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] endgirl.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] madame_denna 2012-04-16 01:36 am (UTC)

Ah, yes, the dead thing. I always forget about that, since in my mind it never happened ;)

It wasn't confusing at all! I think it can sometimes be hard to write stories that use more than one characters' POV, but you did a great job with that here. I liked be able to hear Cara's thoughts as well, especially as she woke up and tried to figure out what was happening.

I can't wait for part 2! :D

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